Aet Lindling

OH WOW this is so impressive compared to the chapter before it, it totally caught me off guard! Reading the content warning my eyes widened and I went back and ...

I actually love this quite a bit. I relate to nearly every line and it’s got solid rhymes mostly and a good flow. However, the one main critique I would ...

Oh cool, lesbian stuff. Firstly, there should definitely not be a comma after ‘slight’ where Tikaya said there should be. No shade meant, but that is incorrect. Anyway, the way ...

I like the singing accompaniment, it makes it much easier to see how the lyrics are meant to sound and effectively critique. Keep it up for your pieces even if ...

Well, there isn't too much to critique here. I'm assuming this is meant as a joking one-off, and it fulfills its purpose decently well for that, as far as subject ...

Gotta say, while this isn't terrible, it's certainly not as good as people are making it out to be. There are some fairly major flaws that reveal themselves on closer ...

Now, I have to admit 2014 was by far one of the worst years I've had, so I may not be the best person for sympathy here. :P But despite ...

You're off to a good start! The pacing emotionally is decent, and you've picked something worth talking about. However, I must say, taken on its own this poem doesn't make ...

You suggest that you are perfecting ASCII boobies in this poem, however you never make a significant development I feel would have added greatly to the work. ( o Y ...

Hi there, Sionarama! There's not much to really critique here, of course, since it's a rather short poem, but I'll do what I can. It's interesting, and while I get ...

I certainly don't dislike it as much as carbonCore did, but with as little offense intended as possible... my god, how is this getting so much praise? First thing, line ...

This is certainly something. I mean, it's not good, the capital words and exclamation points aren't necessary at all and it's all very disjointed, awkward, and bizarre. But it definitely ...

I miss spelled person as perso No worries, click on the Edit button to the top right of your post and you can edit it to change whatever you need ...

Well, this is... odd. I guess I see why no one's criticized it yet, given the subject matter. Pretty much the only feeling I got from this, though, is that ...

Hey there, GeeLyria. I like this more than the other Christian writings that populate the Featured Works section because it doesn't sacrifice the entire point of a piece of writing ...